B*******d 发帖数: 1153 | 1 (小女写的,六年级)
The Blackfish's Death
I was swimming by,
Minding my own business,
When I noticed a tasty crab,
Its legs waving in the water.
I zipped over
Gulped it down;
And only then did I notice
The hook is sharp.
The water was tinted
With my blood,
My head was throbbing
From pain and from fear.
When all of a sudden,
I could feel a jerk.
Struggled against it,
But I still went up.
I was fished out of the water,
Flopping on the deck.
I gasped and heaved,
Gulping for air.
My last thought was,
"I neve |
p**e 发帖数: 335 | |
g*****l 发帖数: 130 | 3 才女啊
【在 B*******d 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : (小女写的,六年级) : The Blackfish's Death : I was swimming by, : Minding my own business, : When I noticed a tasty crab, : Its legs waving in the water. : I zipped over : Gulped it down; : And only then did I notice : The hook is sharp.
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r**u 发帖数: 1567 | 4 哈哈哈,写的很生动。BTW,好多单词都不认识。。。
【在 B*******d 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : (小女写的,六年级) : The Blackfish's Death : I was swimming by, : Minding my own business, : When I noticed a tasty crab, : Its legs waving in the water. : I zipped over : Gulped it down; : And only then did I notice : The hook is sharp.
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i****r 发帖数: 1797 | 5 i am so full of guilt... |
f**********y 发帖数: 1063 | 6 somebody want to kill me?
【在 B*******d 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : (小女写的,六年级) : The Blackfish's Death : I was swimming by, : Minding my own business, : When I noticed a tasty crab, : Its legs waving in the water. : I zipped over : Gulped it down; : And only then did I notice : The hook is sharp.
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M****e 发帖数: 2803 | 7 感觉这gre,gmat还没人家6年级用的单词多啊。
找个地缝去了。。。 |
g******g 发帖数: 1807 | 8 好在昨天没有钓到黑胖子。
有没有才女再写个绿蟹之死?哈哈 |
l*******e 发帖数: 6436 | |
m******h 发帖数: 5753 | 10 不仅自己犯罪,竟然还唆使他人堕落,自感罪孽深重,从此改过自新,
【在 B*******d 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : (小女写的,六年级) : The Blackfish's Death : I was swimming by, : Minding my own business, : When I noticed a tasty crab, : Its legs waving in the water. : I zipped over : Gulped it down; : And only then did I notice : The hook is sharp.
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g******g 发帖数: 1807 | 11 得,这诗写得鱼版要关张了,除非大家都catch&release。
还在回味The water was tinted With my blood 这句呢 |
w*******n 发帖数: 3579 | |
m***a 发帖数: 1407 | 13 Nice,Beautiful Poem!
I try my best to C&R. |
B*******d 发帖数: 1153 | 14 别啊。我只是觉得这个小诗写的不错,拿来showoff一下,没别的意思。舞照跳,鱼照
钓,自然界还是会守恒的。大家能珍惜生命,不做无谓的杀生就很好了。
说一下小诗的来历。两星期前我钓了一个黑胖子,清理时小女过来看,说了一句“poor
fish”,然后随口就念了这段小诗。上周六我又钓了一条,她又来看,我说上次你念
的那个poem挺好的,能不能写下来我给大家看(showoff),她就给写在一张破纸上,
稍微改了一点,我给分了下段。
小女好像有点小文才,不知哪来的,父母都是纯理工,文字烂得很。她去年拿了学校的
spellingbee第一,已然是我们的活字典了,哈哈。
这个小诗确实有点让人感动。
【在 m******h 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 不仅自己犯罪,竟然还唆使他人堕落,自感罪孽深重,从此改过自新,
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m******h 发帖数: 5753 | 15 有时侯换位思考问题很有好处,钓鱼是这样,和人相处也是如此。再赞家有才女!
poor
【在 B*******d 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 别啊。我只是觉得这个小诗写的不错,拿来showoff一下,没别的意思。舞照跳,鱼照 : 钓,自然界还是会守恒的。大家能珍惜生命,不做无谓的杀生就很好了。 : 说一下小诗的来历。两星期前我钓了一个黑胖子,清理时小女过来看,说了一句“poor : fish”,然后随口就念了这段小诗。上周六我又钓了一条,她又来看,我说上次你念 : 的那个poem挺好的,能不能写下来我给大家看(showoff),她就给写在一张破纸上, : 稍微改了一点,我给分了下段。 : 小女好像有点小文才,不知哪来的,父母都是纯理工,文字烂得很。她去年拿了学校的 : spellingbee第一,已然是我们的活字典了,哈哈。 : 这个小诗确实有点让人感动。
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j****1 发帖数: 15497 | 16 geeeeeeeeeeeez, her grammar is better than mine :) |
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Y**i 发帖数: 3016 | 19 刚看出来是六年级。。。一开始还看成六岁,心想,天呐,现在的小朋友!
【在 B*******d 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : (小女写的,六年级) : The Blackfish's Death : I was swimming by, : Minding my own business, : When I noticed a tasty crab, : Its legs waving in the water. : I zipped over : Gulped it down; : And only then did I notice : The hook is sharp.
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t*******y 发帖数: 10477 | 20 刚看出来是拍马P。。。一开始还看成真心赞美,心想,天呐,现在的大人!
:)
【在 Y**i 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 刚看出来是六年级。。。一开始还看成六岁,心想,天呐,现在的小朋友!
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