p****x
发帖数: 980 | 1 俺兴趣多，有时候也写一些政治宗教方面的blog post。
比如刚刚写了一个关于 曼德拉的：
“木有围墙的监狱”
http://www.yuehaixiao.net/2011/06/prisons-without-walls.html
写着玩，自己练练英文的，呵呵。
俺老师50多了（哈弗“屁挨着地）
还天天练英文，告诫俺们”学无止境“。 |
b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 2 Howdy "you are the best", totally agree,
but I was wondering, Ain't they suppose to lock you up for the sake of
public safety, even though your desire of joke writing can never be confined
within the wall of that evil institution. |
c*****l
发帖数: 5203 | 3 can i comment on the writing?
will LZ you get offended? |
p****x
发帖数: 980 | 4 go ahead.
I am all ears
【在 c*****l 的大作中提到】
: can i comment on the writing?
: will LZ you get offended?
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c*****l
发帖数: 5203 | 5 your writing / grammar is not bad.
your structure is ok. pretty clear. a slight jump in thought but not bad.
could use some work on transitions and introducing paragraphs.
your view is a little ideal, but deserves a nice pat on the head.
【在 p****x 的大作中提到】
: go ahead.
: I am all ears
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a*o
发帖数: 25262 | 6 The first paragraph is the most important one, if it's not interesting,
readers won't read the rest.
.
【在 c*****l 的大作中提到】
: your writing / grammar is not bad.
: your structure is ok. pretty clear. a slight jump in thought but not bad.
: could use some work on transitions and introducing paragraphs.
: your view is a little ideal, but deserves a nice pat on the head.
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p****x
发帖数: 980 | 7 Thanks for your feedback.
Quite constructive
That's exactly the purpose of sharing my blog with others.
Your comments make sense.
Btw, where is the "jump of ideas" in my post?
Could you specify it?
Thanks
.
【在 c*****l 的大作中提到】
: your writing / grammar is not bad.
: your structure is ok. pretty clear. a slight jump in thought but not bad.
: could use some work on transitions and introducing paragraphs.
: your view is a little ideal, but deserves a nice pat on the head.
|
b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 8
Does it catch your attention, stir up you interest or make you feel bored?
【在 a*o 的大作中提到】
: The first paragraph is the most important one, if it's not interesting,
: readers won't read the rest.
:
: .
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a*o
发帖数: 25262 | 9 还天天练英文，告诫俺们”学无止境“。
学了没用，等于没学。
【在 p****x 的大作中提到】
: 俺兴趣多，有时候也写一些政治宗教方面的blog post。
: 比如刚刚写了一个关于 曼德拉的：
: “木有围墙的监狱”
: http://www.yuehaixiao.net/2011/06/prisons-without-walls.html
: 写着玩，自己练练英文的，呵呵。
: 俺老师50多了（哈弗“屁挨着地）
: 还天天练英文，告诫俺们”学无止境“。
|
a*o
发帖数: 25262 | 10 Honestly, pretty boring...don't take it offensive.
【在 b*******e 的大作中提到】
:
: Does it catch your attention, stir up you interest or make you feel bored?
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p****x
发帖数: 980 | 11 也许你要求更高吧
对俺来说，还凑合
【在 a*o 的大作中提到】
: 还天天练英文，告诫俺们”学无止境“。
: 学了没用，等于没学。
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b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 12 no I am not offended, I am not the author of this boring article either.
But seems to me somebody is pretending to be enjoying the article here.
Anyway, people see things from different angles, you can not help , BTW the
author is after all a good man with strong desire of improving his English
proficiency. |
p****x
发帖数: 980 | 13 I am not offended at all.
You are entitled to your opinion.
Even if you do not agree with me,
I would like to hear your voice.
【在 a*o 的大作中提到】
: Honestly, pretty boring...don't take it offensive.
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p****x
发帖数: 980 | 14 Thanks for the comments.
So far so good.
I am just hoping that, "someday",
my days will come, as the saying goes:
"Every dog has his days.
confined
【在 b*******e 的大作中提到】
: Howdy "you are the best", totally agree,
: but I was wondering, Ain't they suppose to lock you up for the sake of
: public safety, even though your desire of joke writing can never be confined
: within the wall of that evil institution.
|
a*o
发帖数: 25262 | 15 What kind of books/mags do you read usually?
【在 p****x 的大作中提到】
: I am not offended at all.
: You are entitled to your opinion.
: Even if you do not agree with me,
: I would like to hear your voice.
|
b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 16
Frankly, I don't think she really understand what you trying to convey in
your small boring piece. Maybe, forgive for my rudeness and maybe ignorant
comment, even you, yourself, I guess, didn't understand what you'd like to
express while you were working on that piece. Anyway, asking opinion from a
pretender can only worsen your English level.
【在 p****x 的大作中提到】
: Thanks for the comments.
: So far so good.
: I am just hoping that, "someday",
: my days will come, as the saying goes:
: "Every dog has his days.
:
: confined
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a*o
发帖数: 25262 | 17 You are sexually offensive ...LOL..
all dogs are men? man...
【在 p****x 的大作中提到】
: Thanks for the comments.
: So far so good.
: I am just hoping that, "someday",
: my days will come, as the saying goes:
: "Every dog has his days.
:
: confined
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b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 18 don't be rude, we are civilized people.
this is just a slip of tongue from the underdog |
p****x
发帖数: 980 | 19 I would just follow my heart.
I read autobiographies,history,psychology,politics...etc.
But at least, I have already had an abundance of information to digest just
by playing Facebook and twitter in English.
I do learn a lot from social media and TV.
【在 a*o 的大作中提到】
: What kind of books/mags do you read usually?
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b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 20 you should try "playboy " the essence of English is hidden in this Mag |
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p****x
发帖数: 980 | 21 Noted with thanks.
"Playboy"
and Penthouse were the fav mag. of pres. G.W.Bush when he was younger...
I prefer Asian mag of that nature
hahaha...
【在 b*******e 的大作中提到】
: you should try "playboy " the essence of English is hidden in this Mag
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b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 22
What are you talking about, you have a dirty mind. I was talking about the
English learning. If you wanna learn English, why read Chinese mag
【在 p****x 的大作中提到】
: Noted with thanks.
: "Playboy"
: and Penthouse were the fav mag. of pres. G.W.Bush when he was younger...
: I prefer Asian mag of that nature
: hahaha...
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b*******e
发帖数: 554 | 23
What are you talking about, you have a dirty mind. I was talking about the
English learning. If you wanna learn English, why read Chinese mag
【在 p****x 的大作中提到】
: Noted with thanks.
: "Playboy"
: and Penthouse were the fav mag. of pres. G.W.Bush when he was younger...
: I prefer Asian mag of that nature
: hahaha...
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p****x
发帖数: 980 | 24 It makes no difference whether the magazing is in English or Chinese.
Because there are no words in those mag , only photos
【在 b*******e 的大作中提到】
:
: What are you talking about, you have a dirty mind. I was talking about the
: English learning. If you wanna learn English, why read Chinese mag
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