S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 1 At age 6, she was abandoned.
She can vividly recall that day. It was a cool summer day. Her mom dressed
her up in the best clothes that were meant to be reserved for weddings or
other special occasions. It was a pretty short-sleeve pink dress with lots
of white laces. There were a circle of decorative red flowers in the front
around the collar. Originally there were 4 white buttons but one was missing
. So her mom stitched another white button on with a different shape. She
has wearied that dre |
a***d 发帖数: 2374 | 2 Why her mom abandon her when she had already known everything? It's a huge
hurt.
lots
missing
?"
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : At age 6, she was abandoned. : She can vividly recall that day. It was a cool summer day. Her mom dressed : her up in the best clothes that were meant to be reserved for weddings or : other special occasions. It was a pretty short-sleeve pink dress with lots : of white laces. There were a circle of decorative red flowers in the front : around the collar. Originally there were 4 white buttons but one was missing : . So her mom stitched another white button on with a different shape. She : has wearied that dre
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 4 I don't know why either. One night, the first sentense "At age 6, she was
adandoned" just jumped out of my mind. So it begins the story :) Any
suggestion?
【在 a***d 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : Why her mom abandon her when she had already known everything? It's a huge : hurt. : : lots : missing : ?"
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 5 看了没?
【在 l*r 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 好长。。。:)
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c**********1 发帖数: 1709 | |
l*r 发帖数: 79569 | 7 不好意思看了个开头,看了个结尾。。。
读英文没耐心:(
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 看了没?
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l*r 发帖数: 79569 | 8 不好意思,看了个开头,瞄了个尾巴
太长了,看英文没耐心。。。:(
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 看了没?
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 9 讲的是中国的故事。其实是看echofield的小说,觉得这是个很好的尝试,可以练练英
文。写外国人的故事就完全写不出来了。
【在 c**********1 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 这个故事在中国发生还是说英文的国家发生的呢?
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 10 呵呵,我其实也是这样。。。
【在 l*r 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 不好意思看了个开头,看了个结尾。。。 : 读英文没耐心:(
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c**********1 发帖数: 1709 | 11 哦,如果是英文版的中文小说,就要很注意语法和拼写了,比如里面孩子说的话也要注
意语法哦。文章的感情表达很好了,也很连贯,让人有一下子想读完的感觉,跟着你的
思路走得很顺,可以想象出这个情景。加油!等着后面的!
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 讲的是中国的故事。其实是看echofield的小说,觉得这是个很好的尝试,可以练练英 : 文。写外国人的故事就完全写不出来了。
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M*********m 发帖数: 2024 | 12 I read through, it was fun. Maybe we should write a series of strange
stories in English. How does that sound? I think you used the statement too
often, the sentence always starts with "she". You might consider some
changes.... :)
lots
missing
?"
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : At age 6, she was abandoned. : She can vividly recall that day. It was a cool summer day. Her mom dressed : her up in the best clothes that were meant to be reserved for weddings or : other special occasions. It was a pretty short-sleeve pink dress with lots : of white laces. There were a circle of decorative red flowers in the front : around the collar. Originally there were 4 white buttons but one was missing : . So her mom stitched another white button on with a different shape. She : has wearied that dre
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c**********1 发帖数: 1709 | 13 听着不错!
这样大家有机会互相挑英文的毛病,提高英文!我支持!
that sound?
【在 M*********m 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : I read through, it was fun. Maybe we should write a series of strange : stories in English. How does that sound? I think you used the statement too : often, the sentence always starts with "she". You might consider some : changes.... :) : : lots : missing : ?"
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l*r 发帖数: 79569 | 14 同意,你们写,我来挑毛病
【在 c**********1 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 听着不错! : 这样大家有机会互相挑英文的毛病,提高英文!我支持! : : that sound?
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 15 是啊是啊,我的英文其实很烂的,里面的错误一定是一大堆,不过我自己看看,有时候
能检查出来,有时候检查不出来。写一写,看能不能提高以下。
【在 c**********1 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 哦,如果是英文版的中文小说,就要很注意语法和拼写了,比如里面孩子说的话也要注 : 意语法哦。文章的感情表达很好了,也很连贯,让人有一下子想读完的感觉,跟着你的 : 思路走得很顺,可以想象出这个情景。加油!等着后面的!
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c**********1 发帖数: 1709 | 16 我好像特别喜欢看英文小说,而且看得飞快,当然也要看小说内容,呵呵。
中文的看起来经常犯困,得一个字一个字地输入大脑,呵呵。还好来这里混了以后进步
多了。
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 呵呵,我其实也是这样。。。
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c**********1 发帖数: 1709 | 17 哼哼,这事我也喜欢做。
【在 l*r 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 同意,你们写,我来挑毛病
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 18 嗯,来个英文写作比赛,这个主意听起来不错,不过一定不能太长,不然作者尤其是读
者很没有耐心。
是啊是啊,我的英文真的是太有限了。唯一写过的,就是techical papers.不用
statement用什么呢?给个例子?
too
【在 M*********m 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : I read through, it was fun. Maybe we should write a series of strange : stories in English. How does that sound? I think you used the statement too : often, the sentence always starts with "she". You might consider some : changes.... :) : : lots : missing : ?"
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c**********1 发帖数: 1709 | 19 我觉得别人看然后指出来再改正非常重要,每次改正都是一次提高!
如果不改,以后还会犯同一个错误的,当然要看写作的目的是什么,如果是为了讲故事
或者写诗,最重要的还是其内容的分量,那些语法拼写写作技巧都是后面可以改进的,
呵呵。
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 是啊是啊,我的英文其实很烂的,里面的错误一定是一大堆,不过我自己看看,有时候 : 能检查出来,有时候检查不出来。写一写,看能不能提高以下。
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 20 可能是因为你来美国的时候年记小的原因,接受能力强。我看英文小说是用来催眠的。
。。
讲个笑话啊。我们上学直到高中都是用方言教学交谈,虽然东北话跟普通话差别不是那
么大,音调还是很不同。刚上大学的时候,改成普通话倒也容易。就是有一次,上英语
课,老师让我起来回答个问题(用英文)我一张口,下面就哄堂大笑。我还不知道怎么
回事,后来人家跟我说,我的英文一口的东北腔,我倒。。。
【在 c**********1 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 我好像特别喜欢看英文小说,而且看得飞快,当然也要看小说内容,呵呵。 : 中文的看起来经常犯困,得一个字一个字地输入大脑,呵呵。还好来这里混了以后进步 : 多了。
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S*******t 发帖数: 3956 | 21 如果你能帮我指正出来,感激不尽!
【在 c**********1 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 我觉得别人看然后指出来再改正非常重要,每次改正都是一次提高! : 如果不改,以后还会犯同一个错误的,当然要看写作的目的是什么,如果是为了讲故事 : 或者写诗,最重要的还是其内容的分量,那些语法拼写写作技巧都是后面可以改进的, : 呵呵。
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c**********1 发帖数: 1709 | 22 这有啥?
我在美国才郁闷,碰到马来西亚人说中文人家听不出我是中国哪里人,和他们说了英文
他们就听出来了。哎!
不过现在我经常刻意保留我的口音,来增加生活的乐趣,呵呵。
那么大,音调还是很不同。刚上大学的时候,改成普通话倒也容易。就是有一次,上英
语课,老师让我起来回答个问题(用英文)我一张口,下面就哄堂大笑。我还不知道怎
么回事,后来人家跟我说,我的英文一口的东北腔,我倒。。。
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 可能是因为你来美国的时候年记小的原因,接受能力强。我看英文小说是用来催眠的。 : 。。 : 讲个笑话啊。我们上学直到高中都是用方言教学交谈,虽然东北话跟普通话差别不是那 : 么大,音调还是很不同。刚上大学的时候,改成普通话倒也容易。就是有一次,上英语 : 课,老师让我起来回答个问题(用英文)我一张口,下面就哄堂大笑。我还不知道怎么 : 回事,后来人家跟我说,我的英文一口的东北腔,我倒。。。
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e*******d 发帖数: 461 | 23 Good story. Poor little girl. I hope the people who she met were with good
intention. Looking forward to the next one.. |
a*********7 发帖数: 30080 | 24 慢兔太牛撩,葱白一下
lots
missing
?"
【在 S*******t 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : At age 6, she was abandoned. : She can vividly recall that day. It was a cool summer day. Her mom dressed : her up in the best clothes that were meant to be reserved for weddings or : other special occasions. It was a pretty short-sleeve pink dress with lots : of white laces. There were a circle of decorative red flowers in the front : around the collar. Originally there were 4 white buttons but one was missing : . So her mom stitched another white button on with a different shape. She : has wearied that dre
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l*r 发帖数: 79569 | 25 你看完了?
【在 a*********7 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 慢兔太牛撩,葱白一下 : : lots : missing : ?"
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a*********7 发帖数: 30080 | 26 先葱白再慢慢看
【在 l*r 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 你看完了?
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l*r 发帖数: 79569 | 27 伪装粉丝:)
【在 a*********7 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 先葱白再慢慢看
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a*********7 发帖数: 30080 | 28 胡萝卜丝
【在 l*r 的大作中提到】![](/moin_static193/solenoid/img/up.png) : 伪装粉丝:)
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