f*********g
发帖数: 3319 | 1 女儿就学的一段钢琴曲自己创做的一首诗歌.做母亲的觉的孩子满有创意的
Elude In D Minor Poem
"The sun shining brightly in the sky
Then suddenly it all goes black no one knows why
I hold on to something really tight
what could it be up there blocking the light?
I hear footsteps coming towards me yet no one is in sight
The footsteps getting louder and louder a monster I bet
But in the end all was clear
for that sound that I hear it was just my fear" |
D*****e
发帖数: 761 | |
f*********g
发帖数: 3319 | |
D*****e
发帖数: 761 | 4 好好培养吧，很有艺术潜力。
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l*******t
发帖数: 573 | 5 very nice poem! she is talented!
【在 f*********g 的大作中提到】
: 女儿就学的一段钢琴曲自己创做的一首诗歌.做母亲的觉的孩子满有创意的
: Elude In D Minor Poem
: "The sun shining brightly in the sky
: Then suddenly it all goes black no one knows why
: I hold on to something really tight
: what could it be up there blocking the light?
: I hear footsteps coming towards me yet no one is in sight
: The footsteps getting louder and louder a monster I bet
: But in the end all was clear
: for that sound that I hear it was just my fear"
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f*********g
发帖数: 3319 | |
m***i
发帖数: 4637 | 7 不懂英文poem（话说语言屏障比脑血屏障还要根深蒂固阿），
搁中文里是不错的打油诗：—）没贬义哦
其实写诗的年龄，在20岁左右的为众，意象丰富情感浓密语言干练（一句话可以成诗）
11岁的孩子模拟也不错，而且最好要大声读出来
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: 女儿就学的一段钢琴曲自己创做的一首诗歌.做母亲的觉的孩子满有创意的
: Elude In D Minor Poem
: "The sun shining brightly in the sky
: Then suddenly it all goes black no one knows why
: I hold on to something really tight
: what could it be up there blocking the light?
: I hear footsteps coming towards me yet no one is in sight
: The footsteps getting louder and louder a monster I bet
: But in the end all was clear
: for that sound that I hear it was just my fear"
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s*z
发帖数: 132 | 8 11岁很有才啊！尤其前半段不错，结尾稍逊一点。但是才11岁呀，蛮有天赋！ |
B******1
发帖数: 9094 | 9 goes --> went.
know --> knew
hold --> held
hear --> heard
is --> was
Good work! |
