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发帖数: 598 | 1 包子求助，大家看这个邀请函写的有什么问题，帮我改改。谢谢！
Mar 31, 2012
United States Embassy/Consulate
Non-Immigrant Visa Section
Dear Visa Officer,
Hello! This is xxx, a Ph.D student in xxx. I graduated from xx, xx at the
end of 2011. My graduation ceremony will be on June 15, 2012 at xxx. I
believe the ceremony will be an exciting and extremely important moment in
my whole life. So I would like to invite my parents to attend my graduation
ceremony, sharing my success and happiness. My parents need to apply to the
B2 visa for this journey. Definitely they will need your help during the
visa application. I am writing this letter asking for your help. My parents
’ names are listed as below:
Father xxx
Mother xxx
My father applied his visa before, but unfortunately his applications were
refused. The visa refusal is a big surprise to me since I believed he does
have very strong ties in China. Here are the actual FACTs which my father
failed to present clearly last time:
1. My father is a cadre of the trade union in xxx. He is busy with
publicizing the corporate culture everyday. He loves his work. It is hard
for him to take a short vocation.
2. My father have owned three houses, one in xxx for living, two in xxx for
renting. He need to take care of the renting business in China. It is
impossible for them to stay in US for a long period.
3. My father does not understand English at all. It’s not practical for him
to live in a English-speaking country without his favorable TV programs and
delicious Chinese food. Furthermore, he might get bored with much less
friends to talk to.
I am looking forward to the reunion of my parents and wish to get support
from you. If you have any questions, please do not hesitate to contact me
either by email at xxx, or by telephone at xxx.
Thank you for your help! | q********g
发帖数: 10694 | 2 Hello！
你写信的时候，也是跟别人这么开头的？建议你先找本“如何写正式信函”的书先看看
。 | i********c
发帖数: 962 | 3 我觉得你不用在信里说上次拒签的事情。多想想如果VO问的话该怎么答。多讲讲回国的
必要性。
另外感觉你爸这么忙的话还能出来旅游，听起来不太真实。好好改改措辞吧 | i****s
发帖数: 625 | 4 Re...
还有，既然毕业了，还叫自己是Ph.D.student吗？已经不是了吧。
我觉得写信的逻辑有点问题的。
应该一开篇就写出来你写信的目的吧，就写邀请他们之类的。你都毕业了，那你现在的
单位呢？
第一段觉得很长，很罗嗦。
整个信都觉得很长。不好意思啊，我没有耐心看完。
【在 q********g 的大作中提到】
: Hello！
: 你写信的时候，也是跟别人这么开头的？建议你先找本“如何写正式信函”的书先看看
: 。
| E********e
发帖数: 1734 | 5 不知道你这封信是support还是weaken你爸爸申请B1/B2签证并且到美国旅游。你列的1,2条都是weaken你爸爸的申请。
说得不好听一点，这封信写得太差了。你随便上网下载一封给签证官的信，然后把名字改成你爸爸妈妈的名字都比这封信好。
graduation
the
【在 x********a 的大作中提到】
: 包子求助，大家看这个邀请函写的有什么问题，帮我改改。谢谢！
: Mar 31, 2012
: United States Embassy/Consulate
: Non-Immigrant Visa Section
: Dear Visa Officer,
: Hello! This is xxx, a Ph.D student in xxx. I graduated from xx, xx at the
: end of 2011. My graduation ceremony will be on June 15, 2012 at xxx. I
: believe the ceremony will be an exciting and extremely important moment in
: my whole life. So I would like to invite my parents to attend my graduation
: ceremony, sharing my success and happiness. My parents need to apply to the
| z**f
发帖数: 434 | | q********g
发帖数: 10694 | 7 你们的认证态度值得学习。
【在 i****s 的大作中提到】
: Re...
: 还有，既然毕业了，还叫自己是Ph.D.student吗？已经不是了吧。
: 我觉得写信的逻辑有点问题的。
: 应该一开篇就写出来你写信的目的吧，就写邀请他们之类的。你都毕业了，那你现在的
: 单位呢？
: 第一段觉得很长，很罗嗦。
: 整个信都觉得很长。不好意思啊，我没有耐心看完。
| L**4
发帖数: 194 | 8 1. what is your current status? you need legally and stable status at US.
2. how often you visit your parents, when is last time, and why?
3. what brings your parents will go back to china but not stay with you
illegally? |
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